What is the issue? Is its importance explained?
The advantages and disadvantages of modern technology. It is well explained from four different perspectives
Are four distinct perspectives easily identifiable? What are they? Is the thesis informative and concise?
The four perspectives are the perspectives of “: university professors and school officials, parents of students and young adults using these technologies, the students and young people themselves, and the makers, marketers, and producers of such gadgets” and they are clear from the informative thesis
Do the introduction and conclusion offer effective leads to and out of the argument? How do you know?
Yes, because he starts the introduction by giving a good background about how technology has changed our lives entirely in five years
Is the essay effective? Explain? What would you have suggested to the student writer if you had been partnered for peer review?
I would suggest using transition paragraphs between the perspective because it is a long piece and the readers might get lost.
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